You can fall a long way in the rain.
The ones who don't take the old white horse
take the evening train." -Robert Haas
Jonquil, the word drops
from your mouth like two weighted marbles.
They roll on the heartwood and out
the screen door into the front
garden where you spent the morning
writing letters to your missing brother
who was born twenty nine years ago
in the month of May, two weeks
late, and already out of breath.
Been three months since his last call.
February then, the lawn bitter, stunted,
still furious at the sun. Not much said,
kept his
words achingly
polished in the wet parlor of his throat
Well, I... I will... soon... see you--
but if you could, you would have
reached right in, right down, right
through that rigid duct to finger,
just once, the word you knew was there,
unfurling like a bloom that
thrives underground.
6 comments:
Loved the anchoring of the beginning with the word "Jonquil" and the ensuing metaphors!
Wonderful. Would also work as as prose.
I hope I am not assuming anything, but is this referring to a soldier that is away on duty? I know that Jonquil was a name of a U.S. Navy warship, but also a tone of yellow (flower)? I see both themes possible here. If I am completely off, please forgive me. This is beautiful and I love the way it is outlined. Exquisite.
Thank you, Rebecca. I like your idea about a missing soldier. I wasn't specifically thinking of a soldier, but I can see how the poem can be read that way; I was thinking of how siblings can sometimes lose each other throughout life in general.
I really appreciate your comment.
Ok, I am glad I came back to see your response. It is a lovely poem and quite beautiful and sad.
think the line breaks in this new version are doing a great job...
much more impressive... love the pauses...
Post a Comment